"The Poke'mon life of a Pichu"

[Yondemai]

Welcome to my life, I'm a Pichu, I live at Thunder Mountain. I was born 3/12/07, I am a few months old and just learned everything I need to know about to survive the life! I was just walking around when suddenly a Charmander popped out of no where! "Please help me! My mama was kidnapped!" He said. I knew I had to do something! I set up a stand of people who would want to join, The "Black Rescue Team"! I had 3 members (Not including me, but including the Charmander), athe team members were me, Charmander, Elekid, and Spearow! We had a perfect search team! We asked for the facts! Here were the facts that we got from Charmander:
1) They were kidnapped 24 hours ago!
2) The people who kidnapped her had a white shirt and pants, with a "R" on their shirt!
3) His mom had three scars! 1 on a leg, 1 on a eye, and 1 on her stomach!
4) She was full grown Charizard, with littler teeth than a reg. Charizard!
5) His family lives on Thunder Mountain!
We started to get our search party on the move! We found a whole box of Black scarfs! We used them to tell who was on the team! There was exactly 39 scarfs! We wore them and started to search! We saw many tracks or Charizards, but Charmander said they weren't her tracks! We kept on searching day and night, all around Thunder Mountain... But nothing came out of it!
To be continued...

[Yondemai]

We are still on our first mission! The mission was, "Search for the Charmanders Mom"! We kept on looking, and suddenly, we heard a explosion! The Black Rescue Team ran to the disastor! We found out that it was those "R" people again! We ran and saw them! "Pichu! Pi, Pichu, Pi, Pi, Pi, Pichu!" Is all they heard! I ran to the rescue!:) I jumped on top of their hot air baloon! I was furious and used Thunderbolt!!!:cool: Their baloon popped and a Charizard with 3 scars came out! It had to be Charmanders mama! I jumped off the baloon and ran to the sceen! I couldn't beleive it! It was a mission complete! Mission 1: Search for the Charmanders Mom was a complete sucess! :D Yay! It was the completion of the awsome 1st mission!

To be continued...

[Yondemai]

I just had got done defeating our first mission as the Black Rescue Team! :) I'm so happy!:) Anyways, we're back at the center and looked at how much things we had in our mail/savoir box, & man! There was only 3!:( We did expect more! Our first one (The one that we're about to do) was called: "Save The Baby Cleffa!"! We were told that a Tyranitar had stolen her! Let's go!

We had been searching for 1 minute! We we're on the top western side of the mountain! We were told she was stolen on the bottom East! That took a longtime! we had to camp out twice! And there we were! The Tyranitar side of the mountain! The biggest one was holding the baby Cleffa! We went and shouted: "Give her back you big fat....... OMG!" :eek: :eek: :eek: He was 700 feet tall!:eek: :eek: :eek:

to be continued...

[Blaztro]

Okay, you don't seem to know how roleplaying works. In order to roleplay, you must have at least 2 people. What happens is you make an introduction, explaining the backstory, your character(s), and make your first post. THen, someone else comes and posts details on their character, and has them appear, and interract with the other character(s). Then everybody keeps posting, (usually some sort of turn order gets established) until what's known as the waiting doom happens, where everybody waits for someone to post, but that person has quit without telling someone, and the roleplay gets archived.

Seriously, this thread is not a roleplay. It's a fanfic. Roleplays have to involve two or more people, otherwise you're merely telling a story.

[Shiny Espeon]

Good description Blaze. ^^

This also does not (yet) qualify for a fanfic. Several things have gone wrong, from the formatting to the emoicons to the basic plot to the unreal things.

-more guidance later-

[Rain Tiger]

People will be shocked to know that I actually kept this thread around instead of deleting it. Reason? Good grammar and spelling. That's the key. I actually don't mind it, though try to use a few less smilies.

[Yondemai]

ummm.........okay.........I'll try to fix it up.......I really sorta forgot and just started to tell a story, sorry!

[Rain Tiger]

Don't worry you didn't do anything wrong. I moved your topic and fixed any problems.

[3speon]

You use exclamation points (!) after every sentence, even if it doesn't need one. That's overuse and it makes the story sort of lose its shine. That's all I can say for now.